I can't tell if you achieved what you wanted because only you know what that was, what you wanted 😄
there's pretty much no lowend except for the kick so it sounds kind of small, but if raw means minimal lowend then sure, i guess it works

It certainly sounds gritty and crunchy. Too much distorted IMO. I mean, everything is distorted, so it seems way too much, even for the genre you're aiming. It ends up being tiring on the ear really fast, it's all too squashed so it has no dynamics and as Wojtas said, no low end except for the kick, which ducks all the rest of the music constantly because some compressor in the master bus I guess.

Having said that, I like you went the experimental way, and I am no expert whatsoever, so that was only my opinion!

I have to agree with sergio about everything sounding squashed, on those guitars I think some more low end would give you the feel you want the song to have, I think you could make the cymbals and snare even more crunchy to compensate for just how much distortion every thing else has